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Digital Remix Project

http://academic-simulations.weebly.com/

Peer Evaluation 1: John McDowell Inquiry Essay

Does the rhetorical situation address the key audience concerns (demographics, stance, publication)? Is this a realistic academic audience?

People that need rapid inter-organizational communication- second to second basis (more im-esque) high-ranking officers with different technical terminology & language differences.  Addressing a current problem

What about the introduction makes you want to keep reading? Does it introduce the topic/issue and establish exigence? Describe the exigence. Is the exigence personal (relating to the writer as an individual) or is it about wider public and social concerns that the audience might research?

Begin with a narration that demonstrates the problem and establishes the importance that lack of immediate communication poses. 

What inquiry question does the essay pose for the audience to consider? Does the draft pose no questions or too many directions for readers? Are the inquiries open-ended?

How communication between public serving organizations affected by today’s trends of more information, sent faster, and in brief segments?

How does this topic relate to Writing in a Wireless World? Does this essay relate to the course theme?

Modes of communication

Draft Workshop: Kayleigh

1. Overall Effect of the Visual Essay
1. Essay has moderate level of overall impact and presentation is moderately effective.  The header image gives an indication to the content of the website, Paperless Future.  The dark background may be perceived that the future is looking bleak.  Based on the content of the website, that may or may not be want to revised.
2. Composer Feelings/ Development
1. Essay provides modest information about the composer's  developments/ feelings.  It is difficult to determine what the conclusive feelings are towards the paperless future.  It might be helpful if there is an indication given if a paperless future is a positive or negative thing.  
3. Visual Coherence
1. Essay needs more visual coherence.  At the moment, the background colors are relatively dark, with the exception of the spectrum of colors at the beginning of the webpage.  The text is in different fonts and white color.  It is difficult to determine if there is significance to these factors.  
4. Visual Salience
1. Essay doesn't identify 2-4 major points.  It is a little difficult to determine the various points/ thoughts that were originally tackled in the inquiry essay and are now in website form.
5. Organization of the Essay
1. Essay's organization is helpful and clear.  There is a link to washingtonpost.com and an online survey to be filled out.  Below this is a Youtube link, followed by a picture of a stack of newspapers.  It may help the website if this was a little bit more elaborate. 
6. Documentation of the Images
1. Images not correctly documented.  Perhaps a Work Cited page?

Transduction Justification

For my inquiry essay, I inquired about what about websites makes its visitors keep coming back.  Given my focal point of my inquiries was regarding websites, I thought it would be a wise decision to create a website for the digital remix project.  I felt that a website would be the easiest form to convey my inquiries since I would be able to break up my different thoughts within my essay into different web pages on the website.  In order to make an effective website, and not appear that I simply rewrote my essay, I plan on adding graphics that are representative of my inquiry essay to make it appear like a cohesive website. 

            However, as I began the transduction of my essay, I realized that there was limited potential to expand my inquiries in my original essay.  Therefore, I switched my topic to the effectiveness of computer simulations in academics.  While the subject of this inquiry is not as directly related as the previous inquiry, using a website would emphasize the role that computers play in our lives.  Increasingly, our lives are becoming dependent on computers.  The prevalence of simulations as teaching tools is growing in academics.  We are using these simulations to understand the compounding effects that certain actions have in the real world, and not the theoretical world.  Since I will draw on examples from various classes and different areas of academics, it would be beneficial to make a website.  It is a methodological way to group and box information so that information and inquiries can be conveyed to the audience successfully.